I am always proud of how you take the bull by the horns and get things done. You took on this task on your own and I call that “ownwork” as you do it for “you” and “you take ownership” of the work and your future. You are a highly motivated writer and I am impressed with how you organized the writing into the countries and as such individual paragraphs. I made some simple revisions and you can compare and contrast your original to this piece but I want you to give this piece a deeper look. Please notice that many of your sentences begin with the word: “There” or the phrase: “I learned.” Writers work to engage the reader and make the writing interesting by using different words. Try to change this piece up. Also, remember reporters report from the 3rd person. Try to take the “I” out of this report. Great effort as always.
It was Friday May 16th. Not an ordinary Friday. It was Expo Friday and it was amazing!
First stop…the Netherlands. There were delicious treats from donuts to crackers. Then we viewed a powerpoint presentation of Vincent Van Gogh. It told us about his life and what he did. Across from that were students painting in front of a background of The Starry Night. There was also an easel set up where visitors can paint and find their own inner Van Gogh. . I witnessed Ms. Snow the Assistant Principal draw a wonderful tree.
Next up…Brazil. There was the ‘Wall of Fame” which showed the essays made by Fifth Grade students about a Famous Brazilian. Then there was “Carnival”. Student’s from Ms. LaRossa’s class were dancing and singing to Brazilian music. After that was a powerpoint presentation by Zuri Kwesi about the rainforest and chocolate and justice. There even was a rain forest where students explained what goes on. Finally, there was “The Chocolate Project”!! There were chocolate bars with wrappers that were created by students. Across from that was a picture of the global value chain of the chocolate industry.
Further down the hallway was Australia. There were pictures of the “Sydney Opera House” made by students. Across from that, there was pictures of Australian animals. They had animals such as: koalas, squirrels, and birds. After that there was the Coral Reef. There were many beautiful pictures of sea creatures. There was a picture of a mermaid sitting on a rock next to a goldfish that jumped out of the water. There were pictures of fish bodies with student’s faces instead of the fish’s face which were sweet. Students also made informational books about Australia.
On to the second floor which featured South Africa and Tibet. These countries were the most interesting to me. In South Africa I saw and learned many things. First there was Pictures about South African Civil Rights leader “Nelson Mandela”. There were also quotes about him too and a play put on my Class 4-203. There were Ndeble houses and instruments and there was South African bead art. I learned that South African Bead Art is important to many South African tribes. There was also the South African safari. There were animals from lions to zebras.
Haiku Through The Savannah was featured and Hawa of 4-206 was kind enough to tell be about the exhibit. She told me about the savannah. I learned from her that there are not many trees. I learned that there is tall grass. The most interesting thing she told me was about the baobab tree. It is the strongest and oldest tree on the savannah.
Finally, there was Tibet. There were Tibet brochures and dioramas. Also, there were these beautiful Mala Bracelets and necklaces that the students were creating through finger knitting. Creating a mala is a peaceful meditation. There was also a bulletin board about famous Tibetans. There was Pema Cholaron and Dalai Llama. I saw mandala making. I learned about Tibet prayer flags. I learned that they are hung outside and when the wind bows the blessings are sent to heaven. Isn’t that cool?
To sum it up, The Expo was F-A-N-T-A-S-T-I-C!! I hope it is like this every year.